CAMP DESCRIPTION

Achievement Objectives:

Purposes and audiences

• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• INDICATORS:
• –  constructs texts that show a growing awareness of purpose and audience through careful choice of content, language, and text form;
• –  conveys and sustains personal voice where appropriate.

Ideas

Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.

INDICATORS:

• –  forms and expresses ideas and information with increased clarity, drawing on a range of sources;
• –  adds or changes details and comments to support ideas, showing some selectivity in the process;
• –  ideas suggest awareness of a range of dimensions or viewpoints.

Language features

Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.

• INDICATORS:
• –  uses oral, written, and visual language features to create meaning and effect and engage interest;
• –  uses a range of vocabulary to communicate meaning;
• –  demonstrates good understanding of all basic spelling patterns and sounds in written English;
• –  uses an increasing range of strategies to self-monitor and self-correct spelling;
• –  writes legibly, fluently, and with ease when creating texts;
• –  uses a range of text conventions, including most grammatical conventions, appropriately and with increasing accuracy.

Structure

• Show a developing understanding of text structures.
• INDICATORS:
• –  understands that the order and organisation of words, sentences, paragraphs, and images contribute to and affect text meaning;
• –  identifies a range of text forms and recognises some of their characteristics and conventions.
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Motivation:

• Write a description about one event/experience from camp.

Key outcomes:

• To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths - simple/compound/complex
• Edit and rework

    

• Effective peer checking and feedback

My draft and editing:

Published writing:Sweet when I heard that coasteering  was a water activity I was  really excited.

                 

                   I strolled down to the wet suit shed to get our wet suits, helmets and life jackets
                   on.
                   We jumped in cars  and drove down to the sea to learn how to jump off rocks safely.

                 
                    I saw the rock we were jumping off, it looked like a tiny mouse.
                    But then I got  to the top and I felt like a giant.
                    It was a little scary at first but then I remembered value be brave so I jumped and it really
                    wasn't that bad and I wanted to do it again unfortunately we weren't allowed because the 

                    waves were like monsters and unsafe.

                   

                  The group scattered up the hill back to the vans and revved our way back to the camping 

                  grounds.

My reflection and next step:

Camp was very fun and I think my writing was pretty ok.

 My next step is to do more complex sentences.